Hello,
I'd love to critique your manuscript for you! I'm an editor and author. I can absolutely provide you with a two or three page document answering the question you outlined in regards to your manuscript. I can also provide comments within the document to better identify sections where, for example, a line of dialogue doesn't really work for easier identification of the section. If you'd like, I could provide proofreading/editing as well, either now or at a future date. I've edited romance novels in the past as well as read my fair share. As an author I lean towards writing fantasy. I can have your manuscript back to you in less than a week.
Don't hesitate to contact me if you have any questions or if you would like any additional information.
Warm Regards,
Kathleen Price